Could I be a TV Writer? The Screenwriting Classes part 2

Last night, we pitched our movies to a couple agents for feedback. I was nervous, but I did it and... I was told that my movie could be a TV series. The agents thought it would be great as a series because of the concept, characters and the story.

Some of the others in class wasn't so lucky. They either didn't understand their stories or they got lost in their pitches. It was sad to hear, because I know they worked so hard on their projects. But that's how the business is; it's tough and truly real.

However, I got to thinking about my script becoming a series. I could expand more on the mythos of Shadow Boy and fully develop the relationship between the 2 main guys.

I have to say I was stoked to think about this. A gay diverse cast, supernatural elements and romance... Yeah, I think I can do it and do it well.

Now I know WHY the Networks Passed on David E. Kelley's take of Wonder Woman

Okay, Okay, Okay! Now, you know how I LOVE Wonder Woman, y'all know! So after getting bits and pieces of this pilot script, I realized why the networks passed on it.

The concept SUX! This is an insult to the character and the icon. Who told David E. Kelley that this was okay?

Here's what did it for me.

• She doesn't need 3 identities. George Perez killed that mess in his reboot in 1987.
• Diana isn't some street fighter, she tackles global issues.
• Why is taking spinning classes and working out to Lady Gaga? Is this a joke?
• Diana is running a company called Themyscira industries? Why?
• As Diana Prince, she is "mousy". Hello? It's the 21st FRAKKING century!
• She doesn't wear the costume, she wears a spandex costume. Does this strikes a memory?

• The script is loaded with Sex and The City-ish stuff. Again Why?
• Her origin is almost forgetten.
• She rocks out in her car, plane and office like a teenaged girl.
• She has a underground team helping her solve crime. GTFOOH!

This is not Wonder Woman. This is 'Birds of Prey' or 'Power Girl'. It feels like David has no sense of Diana at all. He's trying to make her likable to the masses, but here's the thing... We already like her for who she is! Diana is a leader, ambassador, Amazon, fighter and optimist. That's who she is.

And I've noticed that none of the male superheroes had their origins completely ripped up. Maybe some slight changes here and there, but they stuck to the heart and soul of the character. This is a mockery of her!

I hope NBC makes him rewrite this script, because if this is how the series begins it will be canceled within the 1st season.

My First Movie Script: Shadow Boy

I decided to post my first full feature script for my Gay/Horror/Fantasy/ movie, Shadow Boy. I'll keep it up for a few days, before I work on it again. But if you get bored or interested, read it and let me know what you think.
Shadow Boy

I'm working on something... Scary

In between my Shadow Boy 2 script and blogging, I'm slowly working on a supernatural horror script, involving a child killer, a small group of young folks and an horrifying secret that will cover their town in blood.

I'm calling it,  Bedtime Story, and it will be very scary (I hope). I was inspired by an experience I had driving down a dark road in Phoenix, AZ. I remember seeing a skinny man, standing on the side of the road. He was smiling, hold a lumpy bag.

His smile haunted me for months, but he also gave me so much to work with. Thank you, creepy man!

I'm 9 pages in, and so far, there has been 4 deaths. I promise this won't be a complete gore fest, but I will definitely keep it frightening.

Once I get into a good groove, I may post some pages for your feedback.